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What would you do
If your life came unglued
And everything you once knew
Was gone
In a cataclysmic event
That sundered your soul
And left you fragile and broken
With no one to hold
You up

What would you say
If at the end of the day
You learned the truth
Of your lies
And you saw yourself
Through the mirror of truth
And opened your eyes
To the Rot inside
Thats left your heart
A hole

How would you react
To this painful new fact
That nothing was as it seemed
And that your life was a lie
You weren't meant to survive

How would you live
Through this event
The ruptured, broken sky
That fell to the Earth
And destroyed your mind

You have nothing left
Theres nobody left

Your world has decayed
Your senses are frayed

And you fall into eternity
You fall into oblivion...
©2009 ~lordlossxz
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I like the subtle rythm and rhyme here. A couple of stanzas seem a little off, but on the whole, I like the unusual pattern.
Very dark, but I like it :)

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:iconlordlossxz:
thanks. i think that this and the sister poem i posted as well, are both just far out of my norm. i've been wanting to try different styles so i did. i was looking back one day at a lot of my old ones and noticed all of them had the same general style and it kinda bugged me, lol

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:iconanz84:
:D loove the rhyme scheme.
some might say that it wasn't uniform, but i don't think that was the point. Am i wrong? because i loved the randomization and variation of it. totally added to the effect, esp with the rhythm itself. :XD:
:iconanz84:
OH! 0_o
Did you read Dragon Lance?
Just asking cuz it reminded me of the book series. ^_^
:iconlordlossxz:
uhm... no... lol. in fact, im not sure if ive ever heard of it
but idk ^^ lol

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Are my screams loud enough? Can you hear me now? Or should I paint it with red on the bathroom floor?

Read my poems, please!
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:iconlordlossxz:
yah. there wasnt really supposed to be a rhyme scheme. its about chaos, so why should it be uniform ^^

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Are my screams loud enough? Can you hear me now? Or should I paint it with red on the bathroom floor?

Read my poems, please!
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:iconanz84:
oh. hm. nvm then.
:iconlordlossxz:
lol ^^

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